Wow, you have written a great follow up paragraph to the story, although it is incredibly sad that the baby died! One thing to remember is to check your punctuation. Don't forget if someone asks a question, you need the question mark as well as the speech marks.
You have also written a great description of what your rabbit trap would do - it would be great to have a diagram that shows this also.
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Wow, you have written a great follow up paragraph to the story, although it is incredibly sad that the baby died! One thing to remember is to check your punctuation. Don't forget if someone asks a question, you need the question mark as well as the speech marks.
ReplyDeleteYou have also written a great description of what your rabbit trap would do - it would be great to have a diagram that shows this also.